Trust the Owls: Reborn [Ch6 2nd March]

interesting. The story is very interesting and I only played until the year 1502. I had to go back and think about whether I preferred playing female MC or male MC. I'm still confused about what genders I should choose. I tried to use my imagination to create images of a sexy and very hot female MC with hourglass figure body shape and a handsome and strong male MC. 

Why does it have to be such a difficult choice? However, after editing the comments several times, I chose male MC.

Am I missing something? I think we have a glitch here; Its not letting me select gender it just says boy or even get an option...help?

Hello! I read a fair chunk of your story. I understand it's a WIP, but I wrote some notes. The document turned out quite long, as I had to quote some of the paragraphs where I was referencing specific text. Some of the notes are pointing out typos and program errors, while others are more general about the story. 

I put it all on pastebin and set the link to unlisted + exp in 6 months. Feel free to check it out here if you're interested: https://pastebin.com/L4Wf1i4K

It's your story so feel free to take them or leave them, of course. However, I figured maybe some of the notes I wrote could be helpful, and at least save some of your time finding typos. 

Have a nice day!

Sooo... Can we get some hints about the RO's? (Like the red flag one? asking for a friend)

Just finished, great game. Can't wait to read some more.

MC childhood is adorable if a bit horrifying in some spots. Parents are actually nice if with some eccentricities when it come to the father. Gramps is a beast. Kalya is adorable as a best friend and it's fun seeing relationship grow.

One more thing:

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And another

Error: cannot find a closing tag for macro <<if>></if>
<<if $pondprankalya == "1">>…

It's is when selecting to watch the sky with Kalya and "Get closer to her" at the lake with funny name

Sorry it's hard to explain the location in story 

save

https://pixeldrain.com/u/P6thL1BU

Few errors after being "kidnapped" and pressing "The elemental has a question"

Error: cannot find a closing tag for macro <<if>></if>
<<if $element == "earth">>…
and
Error: cannot find a closing tag for macro <<if>> 
 <<if $element="=" "air"="">>…</if></if>

also there is a broken </div> right by the button

save

https://pixeldrain.com/u/mkKD9Zrg

Great game I like it very much :) can't wait for the update

*psst what is the password i the maze? I thought it was the characters first word since I chose the 7 letter first word but I cant open it..."

Pretty good story. Though Chapter 5? Was there something before all this? xD

Really enjoying this so far! I went with Spirit because they seemed the most interesting. First Veil because Cleias lmao. Gonna go for another run and see what changes depending on choices. 

Dap, ești 100% româncă :)

Chiar ți-a ieșit fain (nu m-am așteptat să văd numele "lord Greblă" dar a fost amuzant)

Both the story and your writing skill is phenomenal. I'm so glad I found this game.It is so unique.   Would like to point out that I have encountered an error. Even though I choose my character to be a girl from the beginning, it automatically changes to a boy. Here are some screenshots. I hope these will help

So romantic being called beautiful and even using his blood to write to me...

Tell me he's a love interest please 👀👀

(Also is the game LGBT?)

Hello! I really love this story so far! I’m so addicted to this that I didn’t sleep till 5 am lol. But I want to point out an error which I notice. I’m at the part where the Corbin family came to visit me for the first time. Then at the scene where I go to the maze with Cleias (the companion I choose to go with me is Dimitrie (Hope I spell the names correctly since I’m forgetful). When my character ask hold Dimitrie’s hand he mentioned that his father told him to only hold girls hands. I chose my character to be a girl from the beginning. The same thing happen again when we return from the maze my father called me his son even though I’ve chosen to be a girl. The last error I notice so far is when Dimitrie came to visit me to my room after the adventure with the maze. We talk and there is an error message pop up. I took the screen shots and will upload here. I’m super stoked to continue reading right this moment and the misgendering won’t bother me since I really love the story. ❤️ I hope this screenshots will help. 

Awesome wip. Cant wait for chapter 4

okay eddy you asked for feedback.. so get ready for a long ass comment. My apologies lol

Firstly you published first in April. Seeing that you aren't a native English speaker.. from someone that also isn't a English speaker but seeing how well, quickly and eloquently this story is, is fucking insane. You are already busy with chapter 4 and as someone that follows aloooot of IFs updates take....forever!!! You are a beast my dude. Especially considering how long your chapters are.

I love the detailed storyline and how each element is vastly goddamn different (i chose spirit and they are a goddamn asshole btw) and the complexity of the characters. 

I don't want to spoil too much.. bt our MCs parents are... special.... especially dearest dad. Oh and I would love to know why our uncle is even.. a thing. 

You have a encyclopedia that's still expanding with notes and stats which also must take alot of work. 

You just did so much!! It's crazy how wonderful you are! 

This was sooo good and I was excited just going from chapter to chapter.  

My only question is will the other ROs be various genders? Or gender selectable? except for our bestie she's already a girl 

I'm so excited to read more into this wonderful world you created. Thank u ♥️

Love the story so far, I hope you make a tumbler would be really cool! 

Really looking forward to the next chapter! Also would love to see a Tumblr page for this, if you do make one you already have yourself a follower!

At first i was a bit annoyed by the amount of ellipsis in the sentences but as ch2 rolled in i was hooked. The pace picked up and i really enjoy the dynamic MC has with the voice. Cant wait for future updates :D

This was super fun! love the way you wrote the relationship between the mc and the voice.

Not gonna lie, that was fun as hell.. looking forward to the next chapter🤭🩷💙

This is fascinating ngl. I am interested to see how the mc will develop.

Very good i like it

Ah yes the all mighty spoon

Love it! Would really love to play like as a kind person, since i don't like making innocent people suffer, only the bad ones though.

Ia the last word of the first chapter "Yummy"? 

Also, I hope to see where the story will bring our MC, and what kind of things we can do/convince others to do, though Dad is kinda mhmm violent with everyone but family Perhaps we will get to be a actually good family